The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed.

The diagrams illustrate some changes to a place for instruction.

It is clear that

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the place has changed considerably with a student

library

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. To illustrate, five new features can be seen in the second diagram. The most important development is that the student

have

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has

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place

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a place

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to study and

education

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an education

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Looking at the map in more detail, we can see that private

studying

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study

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tables have been added in the middle of the

library

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to seat more

student

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students

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. A recording studio has been added in the west of the

library

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. A borrowing and returning desk has been separated

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into

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two rooms. There are

also

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some new facilities in the school

library

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for example

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. A desk for

computer

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computers

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has been expanded to

desk

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the desk

a desk

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for

students

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students'

student's

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laptops and has been added in the south of the

library

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Finaly

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Finally

. A

library

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has been removed

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from

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the conference room.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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