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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph illustrates the amount of
time
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 individuals enjoy
leisure
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, categorized by sex and employment status.
Overall
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, the graph shows that unemployed and retired people enjoy the most
leisure
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time
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,
while
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 full-
time
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 and part-
time
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 employees have the least. Housewives enjoy slightly more
leisure
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time
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 than employed individuals.
Additionally
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, men are only represented in three categories: full-
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 employed, unemployed, and retired.
First,
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men show the highest amount of
leisure
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time
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 in both the unemployed and retired categories, with almost 80
hours
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 in each. Full-
time
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 employed men spend about 45
hours
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 on
leisure
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 activities, which is the least among the male categories.
On the other hand
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,
women
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 are represented across all employment statuses. Unemployed and retired
women
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also
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 enjoy the most
leisure
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time
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, with just over 65
hours
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 each. Employed
women
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 have significantly less
leisure
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time
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, almost half as much. Housewives spend just under 60
hours
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 on
leisure
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 activities, which is slightly more than employed
women
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 but less than the retired and unemployed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, leisure, hours, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • disparity
  • illustrates
  • depicts
  • comparison
  • significant
  • notable
  • approximately
  • contrast
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • analyze
  • evaluate
  • data
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