The given bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent.

The given bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The given bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart
provide
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information about the
rate
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of people doing
routinely
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routine
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exercise
according to
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their
age
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and gender in the year 2010.
Overall
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, most
women
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were more physically active than
men
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,
although
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young
women
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showed
lower
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a lower
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rate
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of regular
exercises
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exercise
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than
men
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. As
men
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increased in
age
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their activity
level
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levels
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has
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apply
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decreased
in
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apply
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compared to
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women
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women's
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rates. Young
men
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aged between 15 to 24
years
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old had the highest physical activity
rate
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than other
men
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according to
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their
age
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, as they had the highest
rate
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52.3% and
this
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percent
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has declined to 42.2% in 25 to 34
years
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old.
Then
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, it reduced to the lowest
rate
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39.5% in 35 to 44
years
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old. After that, the
rate
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has increased to 45.1% and 46% in 55 to 64 and 65 and older.
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Women
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Women's
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rate
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rates
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were increasing with
age
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as they had
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rate
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a rate
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of 47.7% in the youngest group and
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rate
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the rate
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has improved
by
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with
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age
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to 48.9%, 52.2 %, 53.3%, and 53 % in 25 to 34, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, and 55 to 64
years
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old.
Then
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, decreased by
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age
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the age
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of 65 and above to the lowest
rate
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47.1
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of 47.1
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, age, women, men, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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