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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line chart shows four different goods transportation ways in The United Kingdome which are road, water , rail and pipeline in
tonnes
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 from 1974 to 2002. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective , it is readily apparent that over 25
years
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 roads
considered
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were considered
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 the highest transportation way,
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 pipelines
considered
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 the lowest among all the four ways . Roads started in 1974 with almost 70
million
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 that increased over time to become almost 95
million
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 in 2000.
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 at the beginning of the period was almost 5
million
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 which gradually increased in 1982 to almost 22
million
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 declined by 2milion
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 in 1996 with a period of stability over 5
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 . Rail and water started in 1997 with the same amount of goods 40
million
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 ,after that the rail shows a downward trend over the next 10
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 to become in 1985 almost 35milion
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 , showing a fluctuation over the
last
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 10
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 to end in 2000 with the equal amount of the starting year.
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other
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the other
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 hand , water shows an upward trend from 1980 to 2000 with a period of stability of almost 45
million
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 of goods transported from 1982 to 1998 , a sudden
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rise
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rose
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rise
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 in the amount of transportation from 1999 to 2000 to become almost 62
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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