Each year, the crime rate increases.What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal

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In today’s fast-paced world,the number of
crimes
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rises every year.The problem should be solved by both the government and the public
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since
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are forced to suffer from offences.
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essay will explain the causes of the issue and show measures that lead to
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tackling it. A prime reason is
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difficulty,which mostly
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criminals to steal from somewhere
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as stores, banks and homes.
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, which are made
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lack of money, are attributed to unemployment and inequality between citizens.
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,
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who cannot find money to buy clothes and food products as others,are more jealous.
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, rivalry could result in burglary,assault,carjacking,human trafficking and even murder.Another main cause is
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disorder that was
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by relations between
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relatives.
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considering
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criminals background
,it could be shown that they were forced by members of their family or bullied by peers during childhood.Being
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with serious mental problems in
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other scope
,it is risky.Because they might commit effortlessly felonies without realizing it. Despite rising of the number of
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,it could be handled with certain solutions and authority regulations.An effective solution is diminishing feelings of jealousy,following that,the government should make decisions to build new
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workplaces
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,which are suitable for those suffering from a lack of money.Another primary solution is
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the rehabilitation
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of criminals who have mental diseases.These individuals should be taken to medical facilities to treat them,
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they can be released back into society.
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,in Azerbaijan a criminal killed all members of his family because of psychological diseases developing during his childhood.
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mostly from childhood, nurturing programs are useful by showing politeness
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is one of the important behaviours in the environment. In conclusion,a decrease
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crimes
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is possible by taking the measures mentioned above,into consideration with both the government and citizens.

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The essay addresses the topic and provides relevant causes and solutions to crime.
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