Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion.

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Smoking is one of the
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issues, which a high proportion of people are
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, some
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for smoking by some governments and businesses,
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others may have no limitations for that. I do agree with the limitations for smoking, but, there should be some logical
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that
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people from smoking just in
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places.
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, it is important for countries and businesses to structure some
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for smoking.
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, there should be instructions for smoking in malls and offices.
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, obeying
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rules
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may lead them to a better community and
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better feedback.
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, some general
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, like no smoking in any place will probably make society
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uncomfortable.
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, it is important that the
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be logical. As an example, managers can restrict smoking in all offices,
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smoking room for staff.
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,
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there
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some logic behind
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, people will not only obey them better
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but
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do they encourage others to do that. To summarize
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, it is
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necessary
for governments and businesses to
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some
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smoking. But, the main point is that they should be logical.
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I agree to have
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for
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issue, especially for
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and public places. In brief,
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making logical
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,
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will lead countries and companies to have a satisfied and obeying community.

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task achievement
Clarify your central thesis more explicitly in the introduction. Make it very clear that you agree with some restrictions on smoking, explaining briefly what these restrictions are.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly back to your thesis. This helps maintain a logical flow within your paragraphs.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. Instead of general statements, try to use concrete examples that illustrate your arguments more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Polish your conclusion by reiterating the importance of logical restrictions and summarizing your main points succinctly for a stronger impact.
task achievement
You present a clear stance on the issue and acknowledge the need for logical restrictions, which is a strong foundation for your argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • workplace productivity
  • illness-related absences
  • environmental pollution
  • discarded cigarette butts
  • economic considerations
  • healthcare costs
  • de-normalize tobacco use
  • smoke-free culture
  • initiation of smoking
  • duty of care
  • public health policy
  • healthier employees
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