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The picture below shows the difference in the layout of the conference centre in 2010 and 2025.

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The given map illustrates the changes in the arrangement of a conference venue from 2010 to 2025.
Overall
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, the most significant difference is that there is an increase in the number of
rooms
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 in 2025, including meeting
rooms
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, game
rooms
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, and an IT
centre
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.
In addition
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, the areas of the car park and garden are
also
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 changed.
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, the residence hall with 20
rooms
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has been
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 constructed in 2025.
By contrast
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, there are some
rooms
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 which are not moved,
such
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 as the hall. In these 15 years, five
rooms
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 have been built in the southwestern corner, which include an IT
centre
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, two meeting
rooms
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 and a kitchen. Near these
rooms
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, two
rooms
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 for entertainment (games and music) are located at the bottom of the map. Another change can be found as well,
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, the car park was moved to the east of the
centre
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, and reconstructed as a rectangular in shape.
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, the gardens were combined together, and replaced by the accommodation having 20
rooms
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 in the northeast corner of the
centre
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.

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task achievement
Ensure all main points are fully supported with clear details and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Consider the use of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Provide a clear summary in your conclusion to better encapsulate the changes observed in the diagram.
task achievement
The essay effectively identifies key changes in the conference centre layout over the specified years, comparing the two maps clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of transitions in describing the different areas and their changes, which helps in understanding the layout differences.

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