The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the average house expenses between two Asian nations in 2010.
Overall
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,
according
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according to
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the given data,
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Japan
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Japanese
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dwellers spend more on transport, health care and
on
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apply
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other
good
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goods
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and services than Malaysians.
However
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, Malaysian
sitizens
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citizens
pay more for housing and food.
To begin
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with, in 2010, Japanese people
pay
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paid
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21% for house rent,
whereas
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Malaysians
spend
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spent
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noticeably more,
near
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nearly
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35%, making it the largest
expenses
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expense
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among all sectors.
Also
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, expenditures in Malaysia for food
higher
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are higher
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than in
Japan
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that
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which
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accounted for 27%,
when
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while
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japan
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Japanese
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citizens spend a little less by 3% (24%). Regarding
to
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apply
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the services, Japanese people pay markedly more. Transport in
Japan
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is much more expensive (20%),
while
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expenditures in Malaysia
is
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are
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less
in
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than
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a
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apply
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double (10%). Other
good
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goods
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and services
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also
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are also
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higher in
Japan
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, accounting for 29% which makes it the largest proportion,
while
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Malaysian dwellers pay 26%
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that
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which
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is the third-largest sector. In
a
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apply
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contrast, the smallest figure in a breakdown in both countries
attributed
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is attributed
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to
the
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apply
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health care where
its
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apply
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account
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accounting
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to
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for
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6% in
Japan
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and 3% in Malaysia.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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