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Band 5.5

You recently organised an all day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter Say what the participant liked about the hotel. Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter in connection with the hotel that I booked for our office meeting which
held
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 on Monday, 4th of April,2025. My colleagues loved the layout of the hotel,
how
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and how
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 your receptionist
welcome
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welcomed
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 us and told
about
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us about
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 the room that I reserved. She
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 asked
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 things that we needed for our
meet
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. Despite the aforementioned things, there are several things which are not good. Some of my staff members didn't like the food that was served
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at
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 lunch. People who were serving the food
didnot
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did not
 clean their hands after the service.
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, I would like to make a suggestion to you that you have to hire some professional cooks for cooking purposes only and for catering you should hire new individuals who only serve the food. It might be helpful for your hotel to provide
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superior quality to guests. I am looking forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Manjinder Kaur

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task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone throughout your letter, especially in the suggestion section, to maintain professionalism.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea clearly to enhance readability. You might want to separate the concerns about the food into its own paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
The letter effectively includes a greeting and closing, which helps to maintain a formal tone.
task achievement
The feedback about the hotel was conveyed clearly, making it easy for the manager to understand the positive aspects appreciated by the participants.
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