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The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of families who had access to the
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
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 in a European country from 1999 to 2004.
Overall
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, the number of internet
users
Use synonyms
, both urban and rural,
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 increased over the years. On taking a closer look, only 15% of urban households and almost 1% of rural families had access to the
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
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 in 1999
while
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 almost 55% of urban people and 35% of rural people used the net in 2004.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of urban
users
Use synonyms
outweigh
Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
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 the proportion of rural
users
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. By probing
further
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, the percentage of households using the net
rised
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risen
raised
rose
 significantly from 1999 to 2002 and maintained a steady phase in 2003 only to rise again, by a
little
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small
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 amount , in 2004.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
users
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 from villages rose steadily between 1999 and 2004 and reached a maximum of 35% in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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