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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table summarised activities during the morning and afternoon
time
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 that UK unemployment often spent on
last
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 year. Unemployed
women
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 spent almost half of the day doing housework in the morning. Other wide range of
women
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's activities would be happening in the rest of the day,
for example
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, visiting friends, shopping and gardening.
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men
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 showed different interests
while
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 being unemployed.
Men
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 showed actively in the morning
time
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 rather than in the afternoon.
Men
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 paid a great deal of attention to job hunting activities with 20% of their
time
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 and the rest in the morning on housework and shopping, They used most of their
time
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 in the afternoon for watching TV and gardening.
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,
men
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 seemed to enjoy visiting relatives, and sometimes doing nothing. Unemployed
women
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 and
men
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 shared the same interest in spending
time
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 shopping and gardening. Surprisingly, neither
women
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or
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nor
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men
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 would like to drink during unemployment
time
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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