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Band 5

You recently encountered some problems with a public transportation service in your area. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company and say - where and what the problems were - explain how these problems affect the public - suggest what changes could be made to improve the situation

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention to the issue that I have been facing
due to
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 the public transport service in Almera town. I have been living in
this
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 area since 2022. I would like to mention to you that there is no
bus
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 stop near my area and
due to
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this
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 I have to walk one hour early to reach my destination.
The
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Firstly
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firstly
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,
main
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the main
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 problem comes when the
bus
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 arrives early from its
bus
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timing
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time
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 and people miss their
bus
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, and because of
this
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 person getting late for their work. Even
bus
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 operator never wait for their commuter if
he
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they
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or
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apply
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she
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apply
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comes
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come
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 early.
The
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Secondly
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secondly
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, the next
bus
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 service comes at next one hour later. we have to wait for the next
bus
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 for 1 hour.
Therefore
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, I would like to suggest that first to need a
make
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bus
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 stop near to our town so we can save walking time and you need to talk with your
bus
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 driver to start on the exit
bus
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 time schedule and try to extend the
bus
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 route so if we miss our
bus
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 we can catch the next
bus
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 within 20 minutes. I hope you will consider all the issues, and take positive steps toward
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. Yours Sincerely, Sanju

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to improve readability.
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Try to use a more formal tone throughout your letter, particularly in the opening and closing statements.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically correct. For example, avoid starting sentences with 'The firstly' and 'The secondly'.
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You have clearly expressed the issues you are facing, which demonstrates a good understanding of the task.
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Your suggestions for improvement are practical and relevant to the situation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transportation
  • service disruption
  • commuters
  • delays
  • cancellations
  • satisfaction
  • frequency
  • communication
  • infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • impact
  • daily routines
  • transportation system
  • suggestions
  • improvement
  • reliability
  • customer feedback
  • transit services
  • route efficiency
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