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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
two
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 maps illustrate the main developments which occur in the town of
Norbiton
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it
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in
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 the present and in the future.
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, the
area
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 of
Norbiton
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area
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 experience significant changes in terms of the variety
facilities
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of facilities
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 and services.
In
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the
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apply
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present,
Norbiton
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 is an industrial
area
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where
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that
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 has eight
factories
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 which are built next to a roundabout and straight road and Farmland is on the north of these
factories
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 and over the river. In the future,
while
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 the roundabout will remain as it is now, all
factories
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 will be removed, and seven housing will be constructed which will
be replaced
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 the original
factories
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. At the same time,
new
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the new
a new
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 smaller roundabout will be developed on the south of the original roundabout,
while
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 the shops and medical centre will be built between
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two
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the two
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 roundabouts. On the east of the road after the original roundabout,
school
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a school
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 will be introduced
at the end
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 and
playground
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a playground
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been
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be
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 constructed between the river and the road, where next to
two
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 housings.
Although
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 the bigger roundabout, where
are
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there are
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two
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 exits, will still stand, it will be redeveloped
four
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into four
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 exits,
where
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which
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 will enter
to
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apply
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two
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 housings and will go to a housing which will be in Farmland. In conclusion, the region of
Norbiton
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 will
been
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be
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 profoundly changed in the future. There are no longer any
factories
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 but the roundabout has been
enlarge
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enlarging
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 to offer a wider range of facilities, including
school
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a school
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, playground, shops, medical centre and new
housings
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housing
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. There will become
a
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an
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 urban
area
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 from the industrial
area
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, norbiton, area, factories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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