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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and two pie charts illustrate the details
about
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 the
police
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budget
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 in one area of Britain in the past two years from 2017 to 2018. The table and the charts give the
sources
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 of the
finance
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 and the usage of the relative
finance
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 respectively. It is surprising to note that the amount of money had a slight upward trend and the
salaries
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 is the most significant
expense
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 during the period.
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 Government is the most important source
to
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police
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the police
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budget
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 which accounted for 175.5
m
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 in 2017
,
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 and rose moderately
at
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 177.8m in 2018. Local Taxes
is
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 the second important source which made up 91.2
m
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 in 2017 and shot up continuously by around 10m in 2018. The tenth
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percent
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 of total
sources
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was
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 other
sources
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, including grants, which constituted only 38m in 2017 and climbed briefly to 38.5m in 2018.
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, the total
sources
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 of
police
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budget
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 have increased steadily from 304.7m to 318.6m over the two-year period.
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, the
salaries
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 of officers and staff
is
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the
noticeable
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important
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at 75
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2017, despite it
fell
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falling
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 moderately by six
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percent
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 in 2018. The
expense
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 of
salaries
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 declined to 69
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percent
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per cent
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,
whereas
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 the
expense
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 of technology rose dramatically from eight
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2017 to 14
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2018. The buildings and transport were still fixed
stable
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and stable
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 unchanged at 17%. In conclusion,
National
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the National
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 Government and
salaries
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 still contributed the largest income and
expense
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 of the
police
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budget
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. All the evidence supports
a
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 conclusion that the income of
police
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finance
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 has risen, and technology has gained
significant
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significantly
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 in terms of the spending of
police
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finance
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 over 2 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, sources, finance, salaries, expense, m, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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