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Band 3.5

The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teacher don't play an important role in classroom to what extent do you agree?

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 have extensively
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 out in
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 and schools for learning purposes.
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, many
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argue
 that tutors are not
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 needed in lectures. I
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completely
 disagree with
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, as educator instruction and support is an essential
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 which can not be ignored.
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 with, many people believe that online learning with PCs and
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 can effectively replace traditional classrooms with human teachers. But kids need personal assistance and individual care to
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succeed
 in their
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where
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 the job of a physical master is more effective.
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, the pandemic year
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 indeed made people realise the value of a teacher.
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 is because children were unable to grasp the E-learning method and strategy were they hoped
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manual instructor for their classes. To add more depth, students need regular monitoring to use
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 technologies where they need proper advice and
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guidance
guidelines
. Since
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 many kids can be slow learners
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they need additional support and motivation to pass their exams which
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 electronic device is unable to offer. To illustrate, many students still prefer offline tutoring
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 online
due to
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 better
encagement
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engagement
 facilities and emotional attachment.
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 lecturer can often give
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 examples and affection which is not a factor in a PC.
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, technological devices
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 evolved in schooling
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 where many
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perceive
 that a mentor is not that dominant. I completely disagree with it, as private classes and extra advice are needed for a
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 growth.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs are well-structured and that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence. This will improve the overall flow of the essay.
language accuracy
Try to avoid spelling errors and typos, as they can detract from the quality of your writing. Consider proofreading your work before submission.
task achievement
Aim to provide more detailed explanations for your examples to make your points more convincing; elaborate on how your examples directly relate to the argument.
task achievement
You provided a clear position on the issue, indicating your disagreement with the notion that teachers are not important.
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You included relevant examples to support your viewpoints, which is essential for strengthening your argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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