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Band 3

Nowadays companies and other organizations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. Think about jobs where uniform is important. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exaples from your own knowledge or experience.

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uniform
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give
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 impression for
companies
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therefore
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, some
compaies
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companies
 require it. The question is, there are
companies
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require
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that require
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from
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their
employees
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uniform
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 they believe
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is necessary. some people believe
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 a good
decission
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decision
. In
this
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 essay, I am going to introduce more details about it.
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 with, The biggest
companies
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 want to be in
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wonderful shape,
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, they have
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 customers,
therefore
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, they want
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their
employees
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 to wear a
uniform
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,
Besides
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, a few
employees
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 wear unsuitable
clothes
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 for work.
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, Apple company did
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their
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spicific
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specific
clothes
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,
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, they faced a few
employees
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clothes
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hence
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, they added a new law which
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them to wear a
uniform
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.
Also
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, there are advantages and disadvantages of wearing a
uniform
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. first of all, the
employees
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 have
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 opportunity to save their money
from
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by
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 buying
a
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apply
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new
cloth
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clothes
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,
on the other hand
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, there are some
employees
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want
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who want
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 to wear
a
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fashionable
cloth
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clothes
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.
for instance
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, Dyu company have enormous
employees
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,
however
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, some of them
annouyed
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annoyed
 especially girls because they can not wear
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clothes
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the clothes
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 that they want. In conclusion, some people would argue is wearing a
uniform
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 is suitable for work.
However
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,
the
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companies
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 which have rich customers want to
be in
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leave
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 a good impression
for
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on
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 them.

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Task Response
Improve your introduction by clearly stating your thesis and the main points you will discuss in the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that you link your ideas smoothly using transition words.
Task Response
Provide more detailed examples or studies to support your points, which will strengthen your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms, which shows balanced thinking.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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