The bar chart below shows the salt intake of men and women in different age groups in a country in Europe in 2019.

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how much the salt intake between men and women in a country in Europe

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2019.

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it is clear that

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as their age

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, the quantities of salt intake

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, most of the age groups are qualified

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recommended intake

salt

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of salt

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quantities which

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about 2,300mg.

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Apr 9, 2025

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The bar chart below shows the salt intake of men and women in different age groups in a country in Europe in 2019.

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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefilt teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?