The bar chart below shows the salt intake of men and women in different age groups in a country in Europe in 2019.

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how much the salt intake between men and women in a country in Europe

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2019.

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it is clear that

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as their age

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, the quantities of salt intake

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, most of the age groups are qualified

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recommended intake

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about 2,300mg.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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The bar chart below shows the salt intake of men and women in different age groups in a country in Europe in 2019.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Completing university education is thought by some to be best way to get a job.On the other hand,other people think that getting experience and developing soft-skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?