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The given graph shows the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP for the years 2000 to 2025 in three areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP for the years 2000 to 2025 in three areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the proportion of gross domestic product spent on three different sectors from the
year
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 2000 to 2025.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the ratio of GDP only rose significantly in the health sector in 25 years. In contrary, a gradual decline was
obserevd
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observed
 in other areas ( education and land transport) from 2000 to
present
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the present
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year
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. In the
year
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 2000, the transport and health sector accounted
4
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% of spending over GDP
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 dramatically inclined by 0.5% in the next 5 years to around 4.5% and 5.5% respectively.
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, after 2005, roads and railways represented a fluctuation in the trend dropping to 3% in 2010. After that, the proportion steadily surged to the percentage of spending in the first
year
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 (4%) by 2020 before decreasing to approximately 3.6% in 2025. Until 2005, the proportion of gross domestic product sharply increased to almost 5.6% and
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 rapidly kept rising till it reached its peak at the present day
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that
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 is 7.4%.
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, it was accounted that the GDP invested in the education sector remarkably dropped from 5% (in 2000) to less than 4% (in 2025) in 25 years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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