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RM4) The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

RM4) The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates
mean
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the mean
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 of the carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per individual among European
coutries
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countries
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 as
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UK
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the UK
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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, the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 experienced a general decline in per capita CO₂
emissions
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,
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 Italy and Portugal saw a significant increase over the same period. Despite the downward trends, the
UK
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 remained the country with the highest
emissions
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 throughout the period. In 1967, the
UK
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 had the highest CO₂
emissions
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 per person around 11 metric
tonnes
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, followed by
Sweden
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 at approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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.
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However
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 both countries saw a reduction
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in
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emissions
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 by 2007, with the
UK
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 dropping to just under 9 metric
tonnes
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 and
Sweden
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 falling more sharply to around 5.5
tonnes
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.
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, Italy and Portugal began with much lower emission levels in 1967, at about 4 and 1.2 metric
tonnes
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 respectively. Both countries experienced a steady rise in
emissions
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 over the 40 years. Italy's
emissions
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 nearly doubled to just under 8
tonnes
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 by 2007,
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 Portugal's
emissions
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 rose markedly to over 5
tonnes
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, surpassing
Sweden
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 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, uk, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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