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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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This
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 chart demonstrates the amount of carbon dioxide emission in various periods in different countries.
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,each country is located in Europe, so they have suffered some ecological problems,
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 as excessive levels of bad air in
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.Especially,
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 Kingdom differed from other states.
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,almost all of them have started significant emissions degree per person except from Portugal.Because it
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 met modern transport
system
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 or relative installments in that era. In
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 of the first statement is that there are no sharp changes took happen between 1967 and 2007.But,Sweden achieved a decline
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in the
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about
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 9 to 5 after 1977.
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United
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 Kingdom's
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also
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 tended to
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 level consistently since 1967.
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,
this
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 graph wants to show modern period has
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huge impact on some countries.
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 chart,Portugal and Italy have encountered permanent growth in carbon dioxide per person.
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,the amount of toxic air surged
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in
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 Portugal in 1987.
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,it shows various doses of CO2 from 1 to 11 in European countries.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per capita emissions
  • fluctuate
  • decline
  • rise
  • trend
  • peak
  • notable
  • dramatic increase
  • steady decrease
  • comparatively
  • significant
  • marginal
  • consistently
  • plateau
  • surge
  • diminish
  • aggregate data
  • historical data
  • metric tons
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