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You found the Lost item at the park and want to return. Write a letter to the park manager Describe the item Say where and when you found it Ask how to return it to the owne

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Dear the manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to report the Lost item that I found
from
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in
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 your
Park
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, "Grand
view
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View
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" First and foremost it was
last
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 week that I visited the
park
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 in order to relax from
views
Correct article usage
the views
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 of the
park
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. The item, which was a concert ticket,
purchased
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was purchased
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 by a big fan of "Million"
that
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which
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 was a well-known team around the world. Throughout strolling the
park
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 I noticed
this
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 item in the north-west of the
park
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where
Correct word choice
which
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 was close to the pond
in
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on
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 19th April. I would truly appreciate your advice on how to return
this
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 ticket to
his
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its
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 owner. Would you prefer that I deliver it to the Lost
foundation
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Foundation
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 department or should I contact
to
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apply
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the police? I trust that you will take
this
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 matter seriously and reply
me
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to me
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 immediately Warm regards Alien

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task achievement
Try to clarify the relationship between the item and the owner more. For instance, describe why the item is of significance to the owner.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using a more logical progression of ideas, linking each part of your letter more clearly to improve flow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for small mistakes in grammar and word choice, as they can affect clarity.
task achievement
You have stated the purpose of your letter clearly and included details about the item and where you found it.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing is warm and appropriate, which creates a positive tone overall.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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