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Fossil fuels are the main sources in many countries but in some countries use of alternative sources of energy are encouraged What extent do you think is a positive or negative development?

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Many of the countries around the world use fossil fuels
such
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 as coal, oil, and gas as the main
sources
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.
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, others are making strides in using alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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this
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 trend offers certain advantages like
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being environmentally-friendly
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environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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, it
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 comes with some drawbacks that should not be overlooked. Admittedly, there are some downsides
of
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 relying heavily on cleaner
sources
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 of power
and
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one of which is their
costs
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. To explain,
the
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technology is still developing and setting up state-of-the-art gadgets that can produce
energy
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 from nature is likely prohibitively expensive for the majority, especially for those who live in the developing world.
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, the maintenance
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 for
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 new technology may be quite out of reach
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 the lack of enough specialists in
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 field. Despite the high
costs
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 of installing alternative
sources
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 of fossil fuels, I wholeheartedly believe that
the
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cleaner
energy
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sources
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 can change for the better. The main and obvious merit is substantial environmental benefits, because unlike the negative factor of fossil fuels which poses a risk to the surrounding, thereby producing harmful gases, solar and wind
energy
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sources
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 are highly beneficial.
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, using
a new methods
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a new method
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 of
energy
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 can bring substantial merits. In conclusion,
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 purchasing the
costs
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 of alternative power devices
seem
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 to be the main drawback, I am in
favor
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 of
this
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 development because of alleviating environmental issues.

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task achievement
Expand on your ideas and provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific countries successfully utilizing alternative energy.
coherence
When discussing disadvantages, ensure a clearer transition to the advantages to enhance the overall flow of ideas.
coherence
Consider improving the linking phrases between your statements for smoother transitions.
task achievement
You've demonstrated a good understanding of the topic and provided a clear argument regarding the benefits of alternative energy sources.
coherence
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main idea and your position on the issue.

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