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Writing Samples
Band 1

You live in the university decisions and you will face a problem with a high level of noise from a new campus restaurant that is open to midnight.‌‌

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing complain letter .University residence. That
plese
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please
 has one problem for me. I don't sleep every midnight
from
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because of
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noise
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the noise
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.
This
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 is having a bad effect on me. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
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 situation
is feeling
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apply
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also
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 other people .
Thus
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 in the
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evening
evning
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evning,
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 we don't feel well . We should be
slepp
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sleep
enogh
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enough
 for our
halth
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health
. The University next to has
campus
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a campus
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 restaurant which is open until midnight.
This
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restaurants
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restaurant's
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voise
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voice
 is so strong . Every midnight
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comes
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come
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come to
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 a lot of people and they enjoy dancing
that
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at that
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plase
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place
please
.
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However
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However,
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this
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 situation is not right for University students . You should be say restaurant director .
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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 should not be open in the evenings. Again one solution you
writ
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write
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a complain
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complain
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complaint
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 letter. Yours faithfully A. X.

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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by stating the purpose of the letter more clearly and formally. Include a brief mention of the effects of noise on your wellbeing.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphing to separate different ideas. Each paragraph should focus on a single point, which will help improve the logical structure.
task achievement
Correct spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'complain letter' (should be 'complaint letter') and 'this restaurants voise' (should be 'this restaurant's voice').
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Provide more specific examples of how the noise affects you and your studies; this will enhance clarity and quality of your examples.
task achievement
You effectively communicated your main concern about the noise and its impact on your sleep.
coherence and cohesion
Maintaining a polite tone throughout the letter is commendable.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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