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Band 4.5

Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. What are the advantages and disavantages of doing this?

In the prevailing era, many individuals opine that it ought to be mandatory for citizens to re-test their driving test after 5
years
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.
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of
this
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 phenomenon. Commencing with the most salient benefit of doing
test
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a test
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each
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every
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 5
years
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 is to prevent road
accident
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accidents
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 on the roads.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
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are having
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 eye problems but they
are
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still drive vehicles that
causes
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cause
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 tremendous accidents on the roads.
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, some
incident
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incidents
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are
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occurred in India because of low eye vision
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 the Ghana Road Authority.
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, the government can earn revenue from the driving test. In some parts of the world,
people
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 have to pay fees
for regaining
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to regain
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the
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their
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 driving licence that can be spent on building amenities
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 as roads, infrastructures and many more. On the other side, the drawbacks cannot be overlooked. Forcing
people
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 to retake
driving
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a driving
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 licence
each
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every
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 5
years
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 can put
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a burdon
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burdon
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burden
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 on
people
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's shoulders because they have to pay fees for it. To illustrate, In
canada
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Canada
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for gaining
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g1
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a g1
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, g2 and g3 driving licence,
people
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 have to pay around $300. If they have to pay the amount after 5
years
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, they may suffer from some financial circumstances.
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, giving
exam
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an exam
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 every 5
years
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 can lead to
waste
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wasting
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 the time of
people
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. Some individuals may have to take leave from work for the exam. It is quite hard for them to manage it.
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, the reduction in road accidents
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rise
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the rise
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 in revenue are the two merits of redoing driving examination.
while
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 paying fees
of
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for
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 the exam and
waste
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wasting
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the
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apply
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time are two demerits of the trend.

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Ensure to elaborate on each advantage and disadvantage with more detailed explanations and examples. This will help to clarify and strengthen your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words more effectively can improve coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Rewrite the introduction and conclusion to include a clearer statement of the essay's purpose and summary of the main points discussed.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and presents both advantages and disadvantages, which shows an understanding of the task requirements.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • driving test
  • road safety
  • traffic laws
  • driving regulations
  • refresh
  • skills
  • unfit drivers
  • economic burden
  • logistical challenges
  • inconvenience
  • public discontent
  • accelerate
  • road conditions
  • test appointment
  • deteriorated
  • practicing driving
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