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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The information presented in the plans gives us an insight into the various changes
library
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the library
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in
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on
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ground
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 floor has undergone between 2001 and 2009
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, a lot of modifications can be seen with
a
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new features
such
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 as economics,
self help
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, computers , kitchen,
childerns
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children
children's
 area ,films and
dvds
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DVDs
.
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,
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the only area untouched is the
librarians
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librarian's
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 desk in the down left corner. From the entrance, the desk on the left and the stairs on
right
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the right
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 have remained the same ,
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 ,the
self help
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self-help
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 in south
west
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southwest
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 and history
north
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of north
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east
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northeast
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 has improved by adding more counters with kitchen , economics and law in the top left . The computers are added in the
south east
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southeast
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 straight above the stairs. On the right, the newspapers and periodicals
has
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 been
tranformed
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transformed
 into films and
dvds
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DVDs
.
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, the empty place above the tables
have
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 now converted
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into as
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as
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a
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chidrens
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children
 area. The fiction
in
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at
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top
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 has
replaced
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 with tables
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 the fiction is now connected to the history in the down left corner .

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the clarity of your comparisons and descriptions by organizing the information better. Use clear paragraphs to separate different areas of the library.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your work to correct minor spelling and grammar errors (e.g., 'childerns' should be 'children's', 'tranformed' to 'transformed').
task achievement
Include a brief conclusion summarizing the key changes to provide a clearer overall perspective on the main transformations.
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You effectively highlighted the major changes and provided specific areas of comparison in the library layout.

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