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the percentages of Australian export with four countries from 1990 to 2012

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in 1990 the
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 29% , from 2000 to 2005 the
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 about 19% ,
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 about 12% , in 1995 the
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 about 7% the
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1990 about 3%
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about 20% of
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 1990 till 1995 the
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about 4% , and from 2005 till 2010 the
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 exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using clearer paragraphing and dividing your essay into sections for each country to improve readability.
task achievement
Ensure that percentage changes are accurately described and clearly linked to the years mentioned for better clarity.
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Expand on the overall trends with summary statements to give a clearer picture of overall export behavior over time.
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You have presented relevant data regarding exports to each country, which is important for this task.
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You incorporated multiple years of data, demonstrating an understanding of how export percentages changed over time.

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