The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
proposion
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proposition
proportion
of
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population
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the population
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in four different countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020,
while
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predicted
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further
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20
years
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.
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, four
of
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nations are
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gradually
grow
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in the
predictanble
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predicted
years
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. Malaysia
raise
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the most and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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has
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the
smaillest
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smallest
gain in the entire period. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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has
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the highest
numbers
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of
resident
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residents
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with 31%, followed
a
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raised to
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50%,
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experienced some
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,
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up with 40% in 2020. In the predictable future, the
population
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will increase to 50%
become
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becoming
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the third place.
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, the
least
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one is Indonesia with 15% in1970,
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consistantly
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consistently
claimed between 50
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, meanwhile,
its
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has
same
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propotion
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proportion
compared with
Philippines
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the Philippines
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in 2010,
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over that in the future and predicted with 60% in 2024, which is the
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city.
On the other hand
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, Thailand was in
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third place with about 20%
population
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, its has a not significant
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in
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1970 to 1990,
then
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stay
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a steady
population
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for 30
years
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, it is noticeable that has a cross with Indonesia in 2000, became the lowest
propulation
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population
city,
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it was
prected
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predicted
that will
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a 20% increase.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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