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The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.

The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.
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A glance at the bar chart given illustrates information about estimated annual gaming
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companies
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companies'
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 profit in the world in 2022. Based on an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that Sony achieved the highest position
in
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 the earth by more than US$ 25
billion
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 ,
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 Ubisoft attained the
last
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 spot by less than US$ 3
billion
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. From an initial figure, Sony took
the
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first place as a leading
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companies
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company
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 at US$ 28,2
billion
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. The second spot was Microsoft by US$ 16,2
billion
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.
Tencenta
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Tencent
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 took the following position at US$ 13,9
billion
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 and Nintendo at US$ 13,8
billion
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, respectively, with a small gap of only US$ 1 million.
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, Activision Blizzard and EA took the following positions with
the
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 gap of only US$ 0,4
billion
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. The seventh position for the growing gaming institution was taken by Epic Games at US$ 5,8
billion
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. The next three places were attained by Take-Two Interactive at US$ 3.5
billion
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 and Bandai Namco at US$ 3.1
billion
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. The Ubisoft
was obtained
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 the least revenue comparing other
companies
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 by US$ 2.5
billion
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.
To sum up
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, these ten worldwide
companies
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 average revenue were approximately around US$ 15
billion
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