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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects at university in many countries. Why is this? What effects does this have on society?

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Today,most
students
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 do not tend to follow
science
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subjects
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 at colleges in many countries.Several underlying factors
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 as difficulties
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and a feeling of boredom,
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students
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 to be distracted from these
subjects
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,so the causes result in a decline of experts in the
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 which are essential for
society
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.I will examine the main causes and show their effects on the
society
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. The reasons why
students
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 do not want to pursue the
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 which are important for the
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are varied.The main reason is the
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’ difficulty because
science
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subjects
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 require much time to study in university
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 many investigations to develop.
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,it might be considered that
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 many improvements in technology many
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 choose
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subjects
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 related to technology and today’s requirements.Another prime reason is that people who
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 university elucidate these
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 are outdated and tedious.
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,the reason why they are boring, is that there is not any award to research or to encourage.
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,the research conducted by Harvard University shows that people’s interest in
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 significantly decreased compared to the past.
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, it is possible to show that a decline in interest in
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 affects the
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.The first effect is to decline of knowledge,
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 countries that do not take any measurements to increase people’s interest,could not develop in
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 differently from others.
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 if the number of experts who explore these sciences, decreases,it will lead to a lack of knowledge in essential fields
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 as history or literature. In order to encourage the fields, the governments might invest in modern equipment for them to study more effectively.
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,negligence in history might cause to form flawed opinions among populations. In conclusion,nowadays,feelings of boredom and difficulty hinder
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 from following necessary
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 for
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society
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.
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,they lead to lacking
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information and experts in these fields.

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You have identified relevant issues regarding the reluctance to pursue science subjects and provided a clear conclusion that summarizes your points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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