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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sport centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main futures and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps illustrate the future developments of a university’s
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sport
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sports
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 centre in an unknown city. Over the next few years, the facilities will be developed into one integrated
sport
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 complex, by adding some features
such
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 as a leisure
pool
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, hall and dance studio. Nowadays, the area of
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the sport
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sport
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 complex is divided into three sections, a gymnasium in the centre, and two outdoor courts, each of which is established in the east and west. Inside the gymnasium, there are several
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sport
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 facilities that are provided by the university,
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 as a swimming
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, gym, changing room, seating place and reception. In the future, the fitness centre will be refurbished into a one-integrated complex by having several new developments,
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 as a larger size of the gym and more changing rooms. On the west side, the courts will be demolished and changed into a leisure
pool
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.
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, a shop will be located on the south of
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pool
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the pool
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. On the flip side, just like the west, the court will be removed, and a new hall will be built,
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 a café and dance studios in the vicinity of the areas.
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, the swimming
pool
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, seating area and reception will be maintained.

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task achievement
Provide a clearer overview in the introduction that summarizes the key changes between the current and future layout.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance transitions between ideas to improve the flow of information (e.g., using linking words to connect sentences or sections).
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Specify the current features in more detail and how they are adapted or replaced in the future plan to further support your comparisons.
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You have effectively described the current facilities and the planned changes, showing a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay follows a logical flow between the current layout and future developments, which helps in understanding the comparison.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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