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With the advent of social media, more people are getting their news online instead of from print media. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who read news online.

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In today's society, the
advanvement
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advancement
 of social media has raised convenience and efficiency for
people
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updated
news
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through
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online.
However
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, there still exist some concerns. In
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people
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 to search
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news
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for news
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 online will be analyzed. First of foremost, social media provides
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information with no limitation of area and space. To receive the online information,
people
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 only need to simply search on their smartphone, laptop and
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.
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,
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Instagram
,
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is a huge platform
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 a wide range
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of countries
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.
The online
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 users can directly search the account
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news
" to realize the information. Especially in the unstable period of
Covid-19
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, many
people
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noticed the measures of
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 social distance
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online, the DSE immediately
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 the announcement to delay their
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 through Facebook or New Posts on the internet.
Therefore
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, they can immediately consider and adjust their study plan.
However
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, there are some concerns
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 different
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 of
people
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,
as well as
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 the fact check of the online
news
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. For some users
such
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 as the elderly, they may find it complicated to apply the electronic devices. They may even not
familiar
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on
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with
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 how to type
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Chinese
word
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through
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 the keyboard,
Thus
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,
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printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 more convenient for them.
On the other hand
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,
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Online
News
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sometime
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 may not be reliable
enought
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enough
 as the Writer may exaggerate the
news
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 and add too much personal emotion, which may negatively
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 the thinking of readers.

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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by clearly outlining the main points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your conclusion succinctly summarizes the key points made in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences to guide the reader through each paragraph and maintain a smoother flow of ideas.
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Check for typos and grammatical issues (e.g., 'advanvement' should be 'advancement', 'enought' should be 'enough', etc.) to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The essay effectively addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of reading news online.
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You provided a relevant example of how people were informed during Covid-19, which adds context to your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • real-time updates
  • diverse viewpoints
  • interactive features
  • cost-effective
  • immediacy
  • credibility
  • disinformation
  • engagement
  • digital literacy
  • information overload
  • bias
  • print media
  • news consumption
  • online platforms
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