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It is better to live in a big city than a small town. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 era, more individuals have
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 to choose where they desire to live. Which option is better, living in a big city or a small
town
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 ? Some
people
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 believe that being a resident of a small
town
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 is a better option.
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, I would argue it is better to live in a metropolitan area than in a village, for the following reasons. These days, a megacity offers many advantages for society to improve their self-development, particularly personal skills. Urban
citizenz
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citizens
 have many opportunities to enhance their social networking, contributing to personal growth improvement.
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, many institutions provide a variety of courses and seminars, which might help improve individual soft skills,
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 as communication and adaptability.
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, numerous companies offer internship programs, mainly for
working
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experiences
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.
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, more structured and advanced education systems are available. There are many education programs to pursue not only master’s degrees
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 but
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 doctoral degrees.
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, more international schools offer
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 learning environments.
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 that, many
people
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 may access academic and non-academic programs easily
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 the variety of public transportation options available in metropolitan areas. Despite these benefits, being a smaller
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 village citizen could be more comfortable, especially for some
people
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 who are eager to have a healthy lifestyle. Certain individuals prefer to live in a village for economic reasons,
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 as lower daily expense needs, a less consumptive lifestyle, and the ability to save more money.
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, being a resident of a small
town
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 is a privilege for health reasons, specifically
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people
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 with sensitive skin and respiratory issues.
The cleaner
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 air and water are important to
reduceing
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reducing
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 the risk of worsening diseases. In conclusion, living in a big city offers much more opportunities
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 as self-development, education, and career growth.
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 small towns provide a cleaner environment and lower costs, living in
a megacity areas
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megacity areas
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 is a more advantageous choice
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provide
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provides
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 greater advantages for a
promosing
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promising
 future.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea that directly supports your argument. Some points in your second paragraph could be more explicitly related to the main topic of discussion: living in a big city versus a small town.
lexical resource
Consider varying your vocabulary and sentence structure to enhance the overall clarity of your writing. Using synonyms and avoiding repetition can make the essay more engaging.
grammatical range and accuracy
Make sure to check for grammatical errors and ensure accuracy in your phrasing. For example, 'citizenz' should be 'citizens' and 'reducing' instead of 'reduceing.'
task achievement
Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the key points and emphasizing the preference for living in a big city more firmly rather than in a vague manner.
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The introduction clearly states your position and sets the stage for the arguments to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You provide a well-organized structure that logically progresses from one idea to the next in some parts of the essay.
task achievement
The examples provided, such as the availability of courses and seminars and the variety of transportation options, effectively support your points about the advantages of living in a big city.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • metropolitan
  • rural
  • cost of living
  • stress levels
  • unemployment rate
  • specialized fields
  • closer-knit community
  • cultural diversity
  • culinary experiences
  • recreational facilities
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • pollution
  • overall well-being
  • social interactions
  • sense of community
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