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The bar chart illustrates the amount of wheat, barley, rice, and other grains harvested, measured in million tonnes, in India, the USA, and China in 2001.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of wheat, barley, rice, and other grains harvested, measured in million tonnes, in India, the USA, and China in 2001.
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The bar graph illustrates the
production
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 of major grain products
such
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 as
wheat
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,
rice
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 and others in three different nations that are
India
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,
Chine
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China
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, and the USA in 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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India
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 harvested
least
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 amount of products throughout the year
however
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 opposite trend was observed in the USA.
Moreover
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,
highest
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 quantity of collection was of other crops
while
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 the fewer was of
wheat
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 in 2001.
According to
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 the data, in
India
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, the
production
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 of grains was almost equal ; 1 hecture
rice
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 , a little more than that
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the
wheat
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 cultivation.
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, barley and other grains accounted for about 1.5 and 1.9 tonnes of farming respectively.
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, in 2001, China harvested 1 tonne more
wheat
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 than
India
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also
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 China collected 6
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hectures
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hectares
pictures
 of
rice
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. The
production
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 of other grains was 9
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hectures
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hectares
lectures
also
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 the
production
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 of barley was almost double
than
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that
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wheat
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of wheat
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. Looking at the details , the United
State
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States
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 of America cultivated more products compared to other countries except
rice
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 ( 5.1 tonnes). In 2001, 3.2
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hectures
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hectares
lectures
 product was of
wheat
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whereas
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 more than 7
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hectures
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hectares
 of barley was produced.
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, the harvesting of other grain was equal to the number in China.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, wheat, rice, india, hectures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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