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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, there have been unbiased steps taken by the government in order to invest more
on
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 public transportation facilities
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 of expanding new highways.
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 trend is becoming more common for several inescapable reasons
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 as increasing global warming and
air
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 pollution. Undoubtedly,
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 trend is resulting in a positive manner by improving public health. There are several significant benefits to
initiate
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 upgrading
transport
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the transport
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 system.
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, in today's world,
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 the surge in personal
vehicles
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vehicles,
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air
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 pollution is rising progressively which results in
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the deplition
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deplition
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depletion
 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. To prevent
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, public transportation
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 as buses , trains, and metros are developing in many nations.
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, countries like Japan have comparably high
quanlity
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quality
 of
air
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 because of excessive use of rapid transit, which means that less fuel will be consumed by citizens
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 lowering the risk of diseases caused by
air
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 pollution and improving
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 community health. Another reason
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advancement
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the advancement
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 in
transits
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transit
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 is that it
help
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 people to travel around the city who can not afford personal cars
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 leads to
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 equality among citizens.
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, in developed cities
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 as the USA, Canada, and Australia the number of international students is
agressively
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aggressively
 high. To improve the transport system for residents the higher authorities are consistently developing more transit resources.
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, expanding transport facilities results in more job opportunities which
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decreases
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 the rate of unemployment and increases the nation's economy.
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,
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, the cost of initiating public conveyance is gradually high
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 the benefits of
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 negociate the initial price.
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 expand the community conveyance progress in buses and subways is crucial. Governments , individuals, and organizations must all work together to bring about meaningful change.

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Make sure to clarify the introduction to better reflect the arguments you will discuss. A more engaging hook would enhance the introduction's impact.
coherence
When presenting your ideas, strive for clearer organization. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to maintain a logical flow.
coherence
Try to use a broader range of vocabulary and check for spelling and grammar errors to strengthen your writing overall.
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You effectively emphasize the importance of public transport in addressing air pollution and improving public health.
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Your examples, particularly about Japan, illustrate your points well and add credibility to your argument.

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