You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear manager, I am writing to you about the new training
course
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our
company
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will start next month for the employee. I saw the advertisement that
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course
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is about
new
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SAP system which our
company
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plan
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to
established
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for
the
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apply
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future
operation
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.
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,
this
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change will make
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company
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the company
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more sustainable in terms of quality and delivery of
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the product
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product
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and I am
wiling
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to do
this
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course
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. So, I want you to do for me that you can write me a letter on the
company
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letter head
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which you mentioned that I am
current
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employee and I am
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in
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marketing
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manager position and I am
intrested
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interested
to join
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in joining
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the training.
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,
this
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is necessary to do before
join
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the
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which I have to submit to
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course
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provider.
Additionally
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,
this
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course
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will be very useful for me in
my
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future which give me more opportunities and
better
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a better
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secure future.
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,
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it
give
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more job security. Thanks and regards Parth Suhagiya

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking your letter into clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea to improve coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to double-check spelling errors, such as 'wiling' instead of 'willing' and 'intrested' instead of 'interested', to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter addresses all required points of the task, showing a clear understanding of the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
The intention behind the request is clear and well-articulated, reflecting a good level of professionalism.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • training course
  • skillset enhancement
  • educational leave
  • sponsorship
  • reimbursement
  • knowledge integration
  • work efficiency
  • career progression
  • continuing education
  • team contribution
  • productivity boost
  • expertise building
  • industry standards
  • hands-on experience
  • networking opportunities
  • cutting-edge techniques
  • best practices
  • return on investment
  • in-house training
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