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The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featureand make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featureand make comparisons where relevant
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The pie diagrams compare the percentage of total expenditure in 6
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 in Europe between 1958 and 2008. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that clothing was the highest percentage of total spending in 1958,
however
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, it changed 50 years after when people prioritized housing
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the first position. Focusing on
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commodities,
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 clothing contributed the most significant number of total money used at 32% in the first year,
this
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 number decreased dramatically by a fifth in 2008.
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, housing rose from 22% to 32%, replacing clothing as the first priority.
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, food and luxury goods experienced an increase
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 9% and 10%, respectively. Turning to the services, there was a small decline in booking
entertaiment
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entertainment
 from 13% to 6%.
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, travel had
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 downward trend in
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 report by showing
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% difference before in 1958.

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