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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table compares figures and percentages of migrant workers among four different countries - Australia, New
Zealand
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, the United
Kingdom
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, and the United States - in 2003 and 2006.
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, the highest proportion is allocated to
United
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the United
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 States, both in 2003 and 2006.
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, Australia, New
Zealand
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, and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 show
a
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significant growth over the period. The United States had 577,000 temporary migrant workers in 2003, reaching 678,000 just three years later.
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, even if the
number
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 seems high,
every
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for every
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 1,000
people
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 there were just 2.3
migrants
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. Australia and the United
Kingdom
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 exhibit an impressive increase, roughly doubled. The
number
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 of workers became 219,000 in 2006 (10.7
migrants
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 every 1,000
people
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),
while
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 in the United
Kingdom
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 266,000 (4.4
migrants
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 every 1,000
people
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), achieved
the
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second place. New
Zealand
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 has,
instead
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, the lowest percentages. In 2003 the
number
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 of temporary
migrant
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migrants
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 was 65,000. After three years, it grew significantly, amounting to 87,000 in 2006. An important figure
of
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for
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 New
Zealand
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 is the percentage of
migrants
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2006. Despite
this
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 country has the lowest
number
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 of
immigration
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immigrants
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,
every
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for every
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 1,000
people
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 there were 21.2
migrants
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 in 2006.
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 is probably related to
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the country
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country
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country's
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 dimension and population.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, kingdom, number, people, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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