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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in additions to their main subjects. Other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own oponion.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether some university
students
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additions
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 to their main
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 or give them all their
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studying for a
qualification
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. Some people prefer
that
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to learn about other
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additions
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 to their main
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 others think that better to give all their
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 and energy to studying for a
qualification
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This
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students
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, they can
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, they can
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when
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a lot
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different
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, other
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 to studying for
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qualifications. They argue that comfortable because they have just one
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best friend
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all days
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break
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qualification
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 because sometimes
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do more
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know
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good for me

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coherence
Focus on ensuring that your ideas are clearly linked and follow a logical order. You can use transition words to enhance the flow of your writing.
positive
The introduction presents the topic well and clearly states your opinion, which is a good way to engage the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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