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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These maps
demonstrates
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 a contradiction between a current visualization of the Norbiton factorial place and
predictable
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a predictable
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 view after a development stage.
General
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A general
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 overview engages to emphasize
main
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the main
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 differences between
two
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the two
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datas
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dates
data
.The maximum changes related
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increasing
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an increasing
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 amount of housing facilities
instead
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 of factory areas in the future.
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,Norbiton will target to open a new bridge on the river and
expanding
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 playground zones for children.
Moreover
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,new amenities
also
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adds
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 to
modern
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 construction of Norbiton.Including
these
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:
School
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Schools
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,Medical
centre
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centres
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 and shops.The playground area will
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 near to school and medical centre.
Additionally
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,there are
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 changes
will
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 happen in the
numbers
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number
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 of industry buildings.It only causes
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them to
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altering
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 their locations and sizes.
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,the factories
which
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are located in front of
playground
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the playground
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 just did corporation.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,there is one big place which will be stable
inspite
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in spite
 of
development
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the development
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 stage.
This
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 place is
town
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a town
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 and
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the
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 left side of the industrial area.
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,significant growth in the amount of
the
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housing causes
to
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arranging
spesific
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specific
ground
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grounds
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 to build them.
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,
according to
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 the second map,the left corner of the river has 3 building amenities.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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