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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.
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The figure shows the trend of telephone call usage in the UK by the type of call, recorded from 1995 to 2002.
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, the Local-fixed line is the most preferred method which dominates the
overall
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 UK telephone calls until 2002 after the national and international calls and mobile phones.
While
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 local lines experienced volatility,
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, other calls showed modest growth. Since 1995, the local fixed line has shown the highest amount of
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, averaging above 70
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minutes
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 it experienced an upward trend and recorded the highest call in 1999 by 90
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minutes
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, it went down by around 20
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, making it the same level as 1995 in 2002.
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, National and international calls experienced a steady increase since 1995
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 and continued their growth until around 45
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minutes
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 by the end of 2002. Mobile calls
also
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 followed the same movement, where they increased since 1995 from below 10
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minutes
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surged significantly in 2001 and ended up
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 around 45
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minutes
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 in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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