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Band 4.5

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter, •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help with your musical activities You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear........................,

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Dear Taylor Swift, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and
good
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in good
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 spirits. I am writing
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 letter to express my feelings about the concert
last
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 week at MCG
hall
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Hall
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 in Melbourne. First of all, I'd like to admire your
performances
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performance
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, it was amazing and talented. You made me feel special on that night with your performances. I really
enjoy
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enjoyed
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and
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it and
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 had so much fun that I never feel it before at the concert.

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task achievement
Try to expand on your feelings about the performance by adding specific details or examples that stood out to you. This will make your praise more vibrant and engaging.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your sentences flow smoothly into one another; for example, consider using transition words to connect your thoughts together more effectively. This will improve the overall coherence of your letter.
task achievement
You effectively conveyed your admiration for the singer's performance, which is a key aspect of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, suitable for addressing a public figure like Taylor Swift.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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