The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.(Anelya2)

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The presented bar charts illustrate the numbers of males and females in occupations in three countries
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Canada, South Korea and Sweden in the years between 2005 and 2015.
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, the rates of both genders in employment rose substantially over the decade.
It is clear that
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men worked significantly more compared to women in all three countries over the given time period. In 2005, the proportion of Canadian women was above 30%
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men were higher at level 60%, but
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it grew considerably after the decade in the year 2015. Meanwhile, the figure of Swedish females, which was at 45%, went up moderately to 50% in 2015.
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, the percentage of males marginally went down from 75% to 70% for the same time period. Turning to the remaining categories, the level of Korean citizens almost remained constant through the 10 years.
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, when the number of Korean ladies increased steadily from 30% to 35%, the total of Korean gentlemen showed a slight uplift, reaching
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79% from 75% after the same time record.

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