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the two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of canada and Austriala.

the two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of canada and Austriala.
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The given pie charts
compares
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 the
maritial
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marital
 status of the
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canada
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Canadian
 and
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Austriala
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Australian
 populations.
Overall
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,
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Austriala
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Australia
 had
higher
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a higher
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 percentage of married
people
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 than
Canada
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.
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Although
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However
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, the percentage of separated but not divorced population is higher
from
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in
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Austraila
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Australia
. The number of married
people
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are
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is
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more
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higher
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 in
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Austriala
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Australia
with
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at
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 46%,
while
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Canada
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 has only 29% married population.
Moreover
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, both countries have almost
same
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the same
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porportions
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proportions
proportion
 of single individuals (7% and 5%). More than half of
people
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separated
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are separated
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 but not divorced in
Canada
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,
while
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Austriala
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Australia
 has 41% separated population.
Furthermore
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,
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Austriala
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Australia
 and
Canada
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 have very less divorced
people
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 with 2% and 1%. Only 6%
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of Austrialian
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Austrialian
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Australians
 claimed to be windowed and
Canadian
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Canadians
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 have
also
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 same number (5%).
In
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At
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 the same time,
Canada
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 has
very
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a very
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 low
porportion
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proportion
 of
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage(3%),
whereas
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Austrialian
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Australia
 do not have any interest in
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, austriala, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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