IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

(2024) You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say: why you need to use this private room what you need them to provide for the party inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir or Madam, I writing
acquire
Fix the infinitive
to acquire
show examples
 the information regarding the special room for the family party. We are expecting more than 50 people, (
although
Linking Words
 we invited 70 people).
As a result
Linking Words
, we would require a private place to facilitate the guests. My great grandmother will be turning 100,
that is
Linking Words
 the reason we need a venue to be reserved on 18th May.
Besides
Linking Words
 the special allotted space, we would appreciate
if
Correct pronoun usage
it if
show examples
 you
provide
Wrong verb form
provided
show examples
 us
enough
Add the preposition
with enough
show examples
 space for parking to accommodate our family members’ vehicles.
Moreover
Linking Words
, on the demand of our
great grandmother
Add a hyphen
great-grandmother
show examples
, we will be ordering Mexican food. She adores the culture and the flavours of Mexico. Can you send me a reply with
prices
Correct article usage
the prices
show examples
 of Mexican cuisine items that you can offer? I look forward to
hear
Change the verb form
hearing
show examples
 back from you soon. Yours sincerely, Jojo

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

grammar
Make sure to use the correct form of 'I am' in the opening sentence (i.e., 'I am writing to inquire...').
structure
Consider adding a closing statement to express appreciation for their assistance and to encourage a prompt reply.
content
The letter clearly states the purpose and specifics about the event, such as the date and number of guests.
tone
The tone of the letter is cordial and respectful, which is appropriate for addressing a hotel manager.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: