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some people believe that students should learn practical skills at school such as car maintenance or cooking while otheres think that Academic subjects should have the priority. discuss both views and say your opinion

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There is no denying the fact that education is something crucial for our future.
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 it is a commonly held belief that practical skills should
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 in
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school like car maintenance and cooking, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic
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 both points of view and express my
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opinion
.
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withe
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with
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,
learn
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learning
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 skills like cooking or car maintenance could
lead to make
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give
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 them
have
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the opportunity to do things outside the
education
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educational
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 environment .
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 meaning
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young
people
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 may have
a jobs
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jobs
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 do not need a letter from
university
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the university
a university
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.
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, Golden Ramze
he
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apply
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is a famous cook and his store
start
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started
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wen
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when
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 his school
teached
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taught
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 him how to
cooked
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cook
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 so, he found a goal for his life and did not
inter
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enter
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 to
universe
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the universe
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 and
start
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started
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prictes
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practising
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become
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became
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 famous. On
they
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the
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other hand
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another hand
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, focus
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on
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 since
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the sibject
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sibject
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subject
 will make folks
use
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used
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 to
do
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doing
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difficult
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a difficult
the difficult
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thing
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things
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.
In other
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words
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words,
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take
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taking
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this
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 subject for a period of 12 years will lead to
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extending
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there
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their
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mind
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minds
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 and how they
thing
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think
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 it helps them to overcome problems.
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, there is a study done by LDB
university
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 the study said
subject
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subjects
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 like math, biology and chemistry will help
people
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 know how to deal with bad situations because
,
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apply
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this
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sbjuctes
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subjects
foucs
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focus
 on to resolve things in different ways so
it
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apply
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will help
people
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 to always
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a thing
the thing
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thing
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think
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for
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of
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another way to do things or solve it. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having
deferent
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different
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opinion
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opinions
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i
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I
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 consider that
,
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apply
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school
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the school
a school
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 should give
the
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apply
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priority
for
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to
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academic
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the academic
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subject
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subjects
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 because
,
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apply
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 it is the main reason for folks to inter to schools.

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grammar
Ensure all sentences are grammatically correct and well-structured. This will improve the clarity of your ideas.
examples
Use more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points.
spelling
Check for spelling and typographical errors, as they can distract from your overall message.
content
You have a clear understanding of the topic and present both sides of the argument, which is important for task achievement.
structure
Your essay has a logical flow with a clear introduction and conclusion, which contributes to coherence.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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