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The graph below shows the investment trends of men and women in the UK since 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the investment trends of men and women in the UK since 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure depicts the trend of different fields people have invested their
money
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 during
a
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an
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8 year old
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 period from 2008
till
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 2015 in the UK.
Overally
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Overall
, it is seen that the number of
money
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 invested in all different fields
have
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 approximately increased during
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this
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these
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 8
years
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 with
the
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wind
energy
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 investment having the most significant growth contrary to
energy
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 smart technology remained relatively stable with just a slight increase. In the first two
years
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 the amount of
money
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 put into solar
energy
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 was zero,
althought
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although
 from 2010 it
start
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 almost a gradual rise to about 3 billion
pound
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pounds
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. The amount of
money
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 provided for wind
energy
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 went under
a
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considerable growth during the first 3
years
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 and
then
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 experienced a sudden decrease to about
one third
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 in 2011 and after that went up steadily
untill
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until
the
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2015. Investments in other fields,
on the other hand
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, fluctuated slightly during the covered
years
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 with the
last
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 year being almost as the initial amount.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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