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Question The two maps below show road access to City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010, summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Question The two maps below show road access to City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010, summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The
two
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 maps compare the difference
of
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in
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 road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. It is obvious that the hospital has become more accessible to the public by adding more car parks and building a bus station. In 2007, there
are
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were
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two
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 major intersections connecting hospital
road
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roads
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 and city roads. Those
two
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 intersections were upgraded to
two
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 roundabouts. Between
two
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 roundabouts, the space on the west side of the hospital was turned into a bus station. On the east side of the hospital, the common car park for both staff and the public had been limited to staff only. The public parking space has been moved to the east side of the hospital.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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