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The charts below show the average annual spending for canadian households in the year 1972 and the year 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the average annual spending for canadian households in the year 1972 and the year 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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These pie charts
compares
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Canadian's
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 annual spending
of
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households field
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household fields
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 in 1972 and 2002. To analyze these diagrams, we begin by taking a closer look at the data presented, it is obvious that the largest part changed from food to cars, almost
occupied
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 two-fifths separately. As
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can be seen,
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Canadian
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Canadians
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 tended to spend most of their funding on food, which
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 up 39%, in 1972.
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,
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 trend shifted dramatically
on
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 2002,
cars
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 became the most cost category among
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Canadian's
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housebold
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household
 spending.To be more detailed, the budget for food dropped from 39% to 14%,
on
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 the same time, that for cars increased
18
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by 18
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percents
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 in the given years. From 1972 to 2002,
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canadian
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Canadians
 added their funds
at
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 the categories of restaurants and computers, by 6% and 8%;
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, they reduced 4%
money
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of money
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on
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 the book sphere.
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, it is readily apparent that petrol and furniture areas remained the proportion for approximately 10% in both years.

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