The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of learners who completed their high school competency examinations, by course and sexuality identity from 2010 to 2011. First of all,
it is clear that
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more than half percentage of
girls
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studied computer science (56.3%),
while
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boys
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proportions were less than half.
Boys
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and
girls
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had almost equal interest in mathematics, history and physics subject.
Moreover
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, 30.2%
females
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of females
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passed chemistry
course
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courses
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, even though males percentage were half of females.
Apart from
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this
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, geography was
more
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the more
a more
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desirable subject for
boys
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than
girls
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with
10
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a 10
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% difference. It is clearly shown that both
gender
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genders
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were highly
interacted
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interactive
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to learn foreign language
in
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from
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2010 to 2011.
Overall
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, mostly both genders studied
equaly
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equally
in most subjects, but
girls
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shown
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showed
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their
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a
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high
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higher
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interest
to learn
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in learning
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different subjects than
boys
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such
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as computer science, mathematics, physics, history, and foreign
language
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languages
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, boys with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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