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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates how much was value of exports which has different parts as a
billion
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 in a country between 2015 and 2016. The table depicts the portion change of productions exported in each bracket from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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, it is evident from the chart that petroleum and engineered goods were
majority
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the majority
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 of exports in both
2015
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the 2015
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 and 2016 years, though the interest
of
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in
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 textile products severely increased, these accounted for
lowest
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the lowest
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 export amount in comparison to other yields. When examining the amount of money that was put towards certain items sent abroad, petroleum and engineered goods had the highest amount of trade. Petroleum materials were just over 60
billion
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dollars
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 and engineered items were nearly 57
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015, and
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 both of them gradually rose to 62 and 61
billion
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dollars
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 respectively in 2016. Gems and jewellery were the only decreased among export goods between 2015 and 2016,
while
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 agricultural products remained virtually stable
about
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 31
dollars
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. It is noticeable that
although
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the trasnportation
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trasnportation
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transportation
 of textiles had
considerable
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increasing
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increase
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 over
one
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a
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year
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one-year
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 period, they reached an
all time
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 low
of
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in
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 trade and had about 32
billion
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dollars
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, which represented half of the highest exported products in 2016.
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, portion change had the lowest with only 0.81% in commodities of agriculture
whereas
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 the textiles markedly climbed by 15.24%, which was the most large portion among items from 2015 to 2016.
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, gems and jewellery had a
solely
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 decline kind of trade with 5.18%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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